Zach’s Personal Narrative

I believe the article above will further complicate your essay. I thought you did a good job setting the scene, and I thought the way you briefly talked about dreams distorting reality was effective. I think my biggest question when reading your essay was what your central question is. I thought maybe it was about reality, but you could honestly go into so many different directions. The article I chose above discusses how a death in the family can affect a child. I believe that exploring how your grandfather’s death affected both you and your family, your mother in particular, would allow you to explore perhaps what life is really about. I think it would effective to describe what your relationship with your grandfather was like, and how often you currently think of him. I think if you could delve into why his death affected you so much, your essay would increase in depth.


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